Senin, 21 Maret 2011

My Idol

Yuni Arnida
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Describing my idol

                   My Mother
          My mother is my idol because she inspires me to be a strong people. She teaches me about the meaning of life. My mother’s name is Yusdawati but usually she is called Nida. My mother was born on 10 december 1963. So, this year she is 48 years old. She is pretty heavy and medium height. She has long black hair and black eyes. She has small nose and her smile similar with me.
          The things that makes my mother angry is when my house look so messy. She really does not like messy. I know exactly when she will angry, it is afternoon after finished her works because at the day, when my youngest brother back from school, he will throw his stuff up everywhere. Moreover, my mother is very good at cooking. I love the food who cooked by my mother, especially her chicken soup. It is so yummy.
          As long as I know, my mother’s hobby from teens until has four children is collected flowers. She loves flowers which has red colour because she likes red. In my home, a lot of flowers in my terrace.
          My mother is a housewife. She is cooking, washing, watering, sweeping and organizing economic family. Beside, my mother also helping my father sell spices. She is expert in spices. My mother has shoes store too. She managing the store with herself. I really rightfully proud with my mother.
          I love my mother because she teaches me to be a strong people instead from the sentences but from her behavior. I really love her. Nobody can change my mother from my life.

4 komentar:

  1. I think in paragraph 2 you add two different idea,
    first you talk about your mom doesn't like messy and after that you tell that your mom good in cooking....
    you can make it into different paragraph...
    that's all from me...
    at all I think this is good essay...

    BalasHapus
  2. haii yuni..
    your essay is good enough.
    in paragraph 1 line 1 you write
    " My mother is my idol because she inspires me to be a strong people. She teaches me about the meaning of life"
    i think it's better to you if you put the statement in conclusion"

    improve again your essay :)
    see you..

    BalasHapus
  3. yunni

    your essay is good,..
    add more information about your mother,..

    keep writing and spirit,..
    :))

    BalasHapus