Senin, 23 Mei 2011

contrast essay

Yuni Arnida
17384/2010
Writing 1
Contrast essay
Draft 2
Woman and Man
The God creates creatures as dweller in the earth. The creatures consist of humans, plants, and animals. Humans can be classified into woman and man. Woman and man have some differences. The differences are their appearance; their emotional intelligent; the way to solve their problem.
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I would like to discuss about their appearance first. Best of my knowledge, woman like to be an object where everybody look at them. They are fashionable and often up-to-date to new fashion. Many kinds or their needed, such us dresses, skirts, long pants, accessories, shoes, make-up, and many more. In the other hand, man really different from woman. Their necessity less than woman. They just need T-shirt, jeans, small bag, and shoes. The man appearance’s little bit simple than woman.

http://www.nextnewfashion.net/french-connection%E2%80%99s-new-ad-campaign-the-woman-the-man/

The second one is their emotional intelligent. Few of women can hold up their emotional but most of them cannot restrain it. The emotional of woman is more sensitive than man. Woman cry when their sad, they laugh when their happy and they scream when their angry. Not like the woman, man can hold up their emotional. They are more patience in emotional they can hide it but when they patience have finished. They can do everything to make them feeling well.
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The last one is the way to solve their problem. Sometimes woman feel regret about their choice. They feel that they have a mistake when they take a measure. Why? Because they decide something based on their feeling. We cannot deny too that sometimes feeling more stronger than logic but different from woman, most of the man solve their problem based on their logic. They think about cause and effect when they decide something. They think that use feeling make them weak.
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Woman has soft feeling; always use their heart to solve their problem not use their ego but there is one weakness from woman sometimes they save their problem inside, it cause they always feel sickness. Man always use everything methods to make their feeling better. I think, woman and man has same characteristic that is they like to be an object.

5 komentar:

  1. yuni,,

    your essay is interesting,..
    but i find a little mistake,..

    in paragraph 2 "T-shirt" i think add "S"

    revisit it again..
    keep spirit to write,.. :))

    please comment my blog,...

    BalasHapus
  2. assalamualaikum yuni.............

    i think your esaay is good enough. i like reading your essay..

    do not use "the second one". You should write "second"...

    i think thats all from me...

    please comment back may blog... :))

    BalasHapus
  3. Hi Yuni,..
    Your essay is interesting and you also add some picture,..
    That's good,..

    But I find a little bit mistake,..
    Let see Paragraph 2 line 2
    "woman like to be an object where everybody look at them"
    I think that's "women" not "woman" because it's plural..

    I think that's all,..
    Keep writing,..

    :)

    BalasHapus
  4. be careful of your grammar...
    "man really different from woman."
    put "is" after man because different is an adjective... so we have to put to be...

    "Many kinds or their needed, such us dresses, skirts, long pants, accessories, shoes, make-up, and many more."
    it is better "they need many kinds, such us dresses, skirts, long pants, accessories, shoes, make-up, and many more."

    BalasHapus
  5. hiiii yuni'''

    i'm interested about your essay...

    i think isgood enough, eventhough i find many mistakes for this...
    please be concern about grammar and gerunds,,

    i find the mistakes about it,,,

    try it..

    BalasHapus